Nearly a year ago, I began submitting my novel, Honey Ko, to agents. In all, I queried about 65 agents, 24 of whom were kind enough to respond with a gentle “decline.” One agent’s response was so kind I imagined her typing my rejection while crying and feeling dreadful, just dreadful that she couldn’t represent me. I nearly responded with a “There, there. It’s okay. It’s all my fault.” Most of the agents said Honey Ko wasn’t what they were looking for, or wasn’t what they had hoped it would be. None offered specifics or advice.
With those rejections in mind, as well as the final comment of my editor: “This manuscript does not work. Your main character is not likeable,” I decided to revise the novel. I changed the name to A Wished-For Love, revised the opening, made my main character likeable, and revised the ending.
As I revised, I came to realize that I had unconsciously written another story – a phantom story! – between the lines of Honey Ko. That was a major revelation, to say the least. I had already outlined a second book based on a subplot of Honey Ko. The basis of that outline – my Susanna essays – is what the phantom story turned out to be. So, with my book revision in mind, I decided to incorporate parts of my Susanna essays into A Wished-For Love. This move effectively changed the plot, and that was okay: The original plot was thin while the revised plot gave the novel a fuller, more complete feel.
As I continued to revise another realization popped into my mind: my writing had changed. Yes, indeed. My writing vastly matured in the three years since I began writing the novel. I had joined a writing group on Facebook, Writers World (the only writing group on Facebook I would recommend), started this blog, wrote countless essays, became enamored of writing poetry, tried my hand at lyrics (the hardest work of all), was one of four writers invited to submit essays to an anthology (Four Feet Down), and generally learned and applied every rule of writing I could find.
It wasn’t that I didn’t know how to write, but Writers World taught me to refine my writing. I don’t want to appear arrogant or conceited, but I knew naturally how to develop characters and locations, pace my writing, give it cadence – that’s what being a voracious reader does for you. I thank God for parents that encouraged my reading. Yes, they did tell me to turn off the flashlight, put away the book, and go to sleep, but I know they said it with a smile and were proud of my reading habit.
As I wrote I gave A Wished-For Love an edge and added depth, I also added more dialogue and narration. The novel transformed from a novice writer’s (novice of any type of writing) first effort, to the work of a more seasoned writer. The change was noticeable immediately: instead of merely telling a story, I was writing a novel.
I have three chapters to revise yet, and then another read-through to check for continuity. Then I’ll be ready to query again. This time, I have a much better feeling for both the quality of my “pitch,” the quality of my writing, and the quality of my novel.
Fingers crossed. I’m submitting to the dreadful, crying agent first.
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Writers Envy 
A handful of my students free write whenever they finish class work and I will share your reflection with these young authors. Agents will say yes to A Wished- For Love.
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Thank you, Jane! Maybe you can have Bring a Writer to School Day 🙂
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I appreciated this look into your growth as a writer. You’ve used feedback in a positive way. Best wishes on “A Wished-For Love”!
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Thanks, John!
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Thank you, Anna! 🙂
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Good luck🍀
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Thank you!
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Wow. It’s encouraging how you went back and turned your disappointments around. Good luck with the revision. I also think you will receive a yes.
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I had a good feeling about Molly when I submitted to her. I felt drawn to her after reading her bio and other things on her agency website. I still feel that way. I hope she likes the revision 🙂
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Fingers crossed. Keep us posted 🤞🏽🤞🏽
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It is crazy how a comment and a revision will change something completely. I have a Christmas children’s book I’d written and thought was done. A friend read it and made a comment which tweaked the whole thing into a much firmer story. I don’t know what to do with it now, but I don’t want to touch it anymore. Over tweaking is BAD!!!! This is an encouraging read, Will. Looking forward to your next steps!
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Thank you, Kris. Let the book sit for a while. When you pick it up again, it will feel fresh and you’ll look forward to completing it.
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Oh, it is done. Except it is stuck without illustrations. Someday, I’ll find the cash to find someone to make me pictures!
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So glad you listened to the editor and gave the book a second chance.
And yes, our writing matures with time. It’s a muscle, like anything else, and practice makes us better!
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Thank you, Elizabeth! Joining Writers World was the best thing I could have done for my writing. I was constantly challenged.
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Really appreciate you sharing your process Will … doubt I will ever go down the novel path but your acceptance of comments, revisions and determination sparkle!
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Thank you, Ginger. The editor’s comment was hard to accept, but he was right.
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Always think we need to check such comments to see if they have value, very brave of you!
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Your Susanna essays are so compelling, honest and raw. They display a lightness of touch brushed across the page. If this skill is transferred to the novel I am sure that it will be a success.
Good luck, Will.
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Thanks, Stephen. I hope they do transfer to the novel. I’ve had to tell myself to write the same way in the novel, but it’s difficult to sustain that emotion with different characters.
It may seem silly, but I do believe that, subconsciously, I wanted to tell Susanna’s story. I think the essays weave in well; it’s the main character that needs work.
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Wow! Good luck with that :)) why the hero/s was “not likeable”?
or “unlikeable”? How they explained it? 
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The editor said the main character should draw the reader in, gain the reader’s sympathy. The MC can have a tragic flaw, but the reader still has to like the MC or may not be inclined to cheer for her or continue reading.
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Great insight here, thank you for this. Must have been a real wrench to throw out the original and start out in a different direction.
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Best wishes and much inspiration to you.
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Thank you, Rasma!
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Thank you for re-blogging!.
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Hey good luck man, I hope that agent can handle it!
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Me too! I may send a hankie with that submission – just in case 🙂
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I love it. It portrays your thoughts on what you were presenting and your hopes on the new one. It feels honest, which helps decide the emotions present. I love you accidentally wrote another story that was kind of hidden in the first one. That’s really cool. Presenting anything to supervisors is hard and scary, but you got feedback that helped you improve when revising the original.
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Thank you for reading and commenting. I’m nearly finished with the revision. The novel has a much fuller feel. I’m happy with the changes.
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I’ve written several of those “ghost stories” over my first novel, and I’m just now getting it right. I received an offer from an agent only a month ago; hopefully that’ll work out. Good luck! Fingers crossed! And I love the humor in your post 😀
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Thank you for reading, commenting, and wishing me luck! I finished the revision yesterday and am so pleased with it. It has a single, binding theme, tension, and a couple plot twists that I hope will leave the reader gasping for breath 🙂 This is my first novel, and writing it has been such a learning experience. I’m going to begin querying agents again this week while I make another pass through the book and tie up any loose ends.
Good luck to you with your agent! 🙂 ❤
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That’s awesome! Good job! Crossing my fingers 😀 and thank you 🙂
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I’ve written my current WIP through 2-3 times. Each time, I was searching for the right story. I’m finishing up the first draft of the latest version. I’m happy with all the major elements and expect there’ll only be minor tweaks for flow, pacing etc. It was frustrating to get to the end of a draft and realize I had to start again (and again) but I know it made the story better, stronger. And I can apply everything I’ve learned to future works so, hopefully, I don’t need to repeat the full rewrite process.
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I agree with the lessons learned. I’ve found myself thinking that I don’t want to go through the phantom story element with every book. As you point out. every draft makes the story stronger. I’m happier with the story now and a bit more confident with its agent potential. Fingers crossed!
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Fantastic reflection and thanks also for the pointer re: Writers World. I’m close to finishing a novel draft myself and am honestly a little daunted by the upcoming submissions and rejections.
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Congratulations on your novel.! Polish that thing until it shines, then submit. Be patient. The admin of Writers World is one of the best editors anywhere: Randall Andrews. His rates are reasonable. Tell him I recommended him and he’ll charge you double 😉
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I’d be honoured if you’d check this out https://tanyatale.wordpress.com/2017/06/30/back-with-a-bang/
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Tanya! I am so sorry; I don’t know how I missed this. I try to stay on top of comments but still manage to miss some now and then.
I love the story and the tension between mom and daughter. You have a knack for writing little stories like this. Keep on writing!
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You did what the winners do. I have no doubt you are coming out as a winner with this work. Bravo!
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Thank you very much! I have to say, finishing the novel gave me a great sense of satisfaction. It was the hardest thing I’ve ever done. Now, to find an agent and have the book published is my next mountain to climb.
Thank you for your inspiring blog and posts.
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I appreciate your appreciation. I believe that when you succeed after a hard fight you feel more fulfilled.
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Absolutely!
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