Dancing With Orange Blossoms, Alternating POV / Reality

I’m feeling my way through this “dabbling” in experimental writing.


The last time he visited Barcelona, he was alone. I was dead. He returned to our beloved city knowing he would find pain but hoped the numbness would lift as he remembered me in the neighborhoods of my youth. Instead, he found the city also in mourning. The warm glow of Gaudi’s lanterns had turned garish, the music on the Plaça Reial harsh. The city we both loved abandoned him as it reclaimed the memories of its daughter and taunted him with them like the ghostly imaginings of a hopeful heart. The city that belonged to everyone now belonged to everyone but Samuel.

Andalucía, the part of Spain I lived in, had become Susanna’s home after she left Barcelona for warmer weather. I lived in her world as I lived among her people and I loved them for the way they reminded me of her. This land nourished many civilizations over the centuries and millions of people had lived, loved, and died here. I, too, would be one of those who lived and loved here, but Susanna would be the one who died. I loved the ancient feel of Spain; at times, Spain made me feel two-thousand years old, ageless and timeless. I wanted the memory of my love for Susanna to span two-thousand years more and be recalled by someone like me in the far, distant future.

Or someone like me.

Oh! Before I forget, I must apologize for my accent. I speak English well, but made a conscious effort to retain my natural voice and not sound false. I think it’s rather charming, don’t you?

After a week of wandering the streets we had once walked together, Samuel found himself late one night at a familiar restaurant on the Plaça Reial. He didn’t recall walking there since he followed his feet while his mind swirled with memory. It had been our favorite destination as we always began our nights with a late dinner before strolling the streets until the discotheques came to life. Then we danced and danced and danced until the sky turned pink with sunrise. Ohh, Samuel was a wonderful dancer, and he held me just so, see? After breakfasting at a little cafe in the Old Town we walked to our cottage above the dunes and slept the day away together.

I closed my eyes. Susanna seemed so near.  I breathed deep and recalled the fragrance of the flowers she wore in her hair on our first visit. It was spring and everything was in bloom and Susanna wore a tiara of orange blossoms we bought from an old woman on the street.

The old woman was a thief! I told Samuel she wanted too much money for the tiara, but he wouldn’t listen. “Oh, she’s probably poor and needs the money,” he said and told her to keep the change. I was indignant. I knew how the vendors worked their robberies on tourists, and Americans were such easy prey. Poor. Bah! We could have purchased two bottles of sangria with the change.

Memories flooded my mind as Susanna’s world surrounded me as a dream surrounds the dreamer. For a moment I breathed the same air Susanna breathed and walked the same path Susanna walked. For a moment we danced among the same orange blossoms we danced among in those perfect days when we were the only two people in love in the world. My dream world slipped away as the waiter approached.

“May I bring you something, señor?”

“I’ll have the house wine.”

“Very good.”

He brought the wine, a pleasant Rioja, and poured a glass. He smiled as Samuel nodded his approval. When the waiter left to tend another table, Samuel looked after him and wondered if he had served us.

(Yes, señor. I served you several times. It has been a long while since you were last here.  I recall you always let your beautiful lady order since she was from Barcelona and understood these things. Ah, but you look sad. I’m afraid now why you are alone. Maybe I am wrong–I hope so. But the death of a beloved wounds the heart for all to see. I am so sorry for you, señor. I felt the magic of your love for one another.) 

I nursed the wine, and as the evening passed my gloom lifted. Maybe it was the combination of good wine and a favored destination, but the numbness gradually faded and left me feeling better than I had since arriving in Barcelona. As I mused on my changing emotions it came to me that I had not been mourning for Susanna, but for myself. I had selfishly blamed her for dying and leaving me alone. I yearned for her return because I missed the past, and the further in time her death receded the more I built our time together into something fantastic and extraordinary, rather than human and ordinary.

We were deeply in love but, of course, we also argued and grumbled like any other couple. We had our likes and dislikes and compromised when necessary. Samuel disliked television, but I watched almost any show laughing and sobbing as the plot dictated while he sat next to me, reading, writing, offering tissues. I disliked the cold but tolerated his love for it. He kept the bedroom window ajar in winter. I set the electric radiator close to my side of the bed, wore thick pajamas and socks, and a nightcap, and pressed against him for warmth. The memory brought a grin to Samuel’s face, and the waiter grinned, too, as he passed by. The memories came freely now and Samuel began to jot notes in his journal. He planned to write about us someday. He leafed through the pages, stopping to read notes he had written some months after my death.

“Susanna’s death leaves me forever in love with a delicate, elfin woman whose memory is woven into the fabric of my life. Her raven-haired beauty and parchment-white skin that dazzled me as much as the smile that graced her rose-kissed lips will remain as fresh in my mind as the love that sprouted from a chance encounter on a crisp autumn day three years ago.”

He considered the life he had led in Spain and the people he had known, and as he did so, his thoughts returned to the time when he learned what it meant to love a woman and found himself changed by me, the woman who taught him how to love, and how to live.

I am Susanna Avila McBride, late wife of Samuel, and this is our story.


Image: Atmospheric Paintings of European Cities by Julian …

13 thoughts on “Dancing With Orange Blossoms, Alternating POV / Reality

  1. It was a bit confusing, but that might have been cuz your first lines made the hair on the back of my neck rise and I was nervous to see what might happen next! I’m going to need to read something sugary or I won’t be able to sleep!

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      1. It reminded me a bit of trying on lots of different sorts of clothing-it was fun, but confusing. I want to learn more of everything from reading this. The waiter intrigued me! I did kind of like being led thru the city by the dead lover…as startling as it was!

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      2. Now that is helpful! About the waiter and the dead guide. I’m interested in what characters other than my POV protagonist are thinking. Multiple POVs can be confusing so it’s crucial that the reader not be led too far astray over who is speaking.


    1. This is kind of sugary 😉

      Flowered, freckled skin,
      Pink fleshy pulp;
      Salivating senses
      Anticipate pink flesh;
      Your fresh scent,
      Raising hairs along my neck;
      Alive, electric, eager
      Shocks jolt my tongue-tip
      Tasting your pleasing juice.
      Flesh-pulp rivulets drown my chin;
      Cheeks aflush with pleasure.
      Strawberries tease my taste buds.

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  2. This is wonderful Will. I really enjoyed the way you balanced multiple POVs so gracefully. Something I can learn myself by experimenting perhaps. 🙂
    I guess it would be fun if you can try the same experiment with characters expressing feelings of sheer joy and euphoria.
    Just a random thought. I think I can sleep now. Thank you 🙂

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    1. Wonderful comment, Shiva ❤ Thank you. I tried to give each character a distinctive voice so the narrative doesn't become static and stale. But it's important to leave enough open to interpretation so the reader engages her imagination too.
      I like your thought about expressing joy and euphoria with alternating POV. Hmmmm… 🙂


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