Updated. Originally posted in January 2016.
I read music in your eyes,
Delicate chorale filled your voice,
The melody of your soul,
Breathed hymn into my life;
Each movement measured note by note,
Dancing fingers played across my keys,
‘Twas not a symphony filled the silence,
But a quartet caressing strings;
Hosannas rose into the night,
Angelic host proclaimed,
Cantata filled my ears,
Notes kissed me in refrain;
No interval could unpair us,
Nor dissonance render harsh,
The canon of desire played,
Crescendo in each march;
And when the ruby of your lips
Pressed love’s red blush to mine,
Tympani’s thrumming pulsing beat,
Marked two hearts beating side by side in time.
Very nice choice of metaphor.
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Thank you!
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Beautiful and full of passion 💕
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Thank you, Miriam! 🙂 ❤
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A symphony of words sharing love. What an incredibly fortunate couple this is. Magical. “breathed hymn into my life” So often hymns are full of lyrics and tones expressing a spiritual love and you added into a romantic love. Bravo, Will. Bravo!
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Thank you, Kris!
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A lovely poem Will.
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Thank you!
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Wonderful weaving in of the music. Beautiful poem, Will.
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Thank you, D 😊
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I loved it. The extended music metaphor replicated by the symphony of sounds your word choice creates as well as the melodic rhythm. Perhaps the poem could end at side? It keeps the rhythm balanced and fluid. Or maybe you disagree? Great poem nonetheless
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Thank you!
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I used to write poetries too, once
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You should write poetry again. I’d love to read your poems.
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you’re very sensitive
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What a very kind thing to say. Thank you so much 🙂 ❤
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I’m writings songs actually. Soon I’ll release an album 😀
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Oh! Excellent! What genre of music?
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Most of the time depressed
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Music soothes the soul; does writing songs soothe yours?
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I’ve never thought about this point of view: soothing the soul. But it definitely enable me to keep my memories and feelings, do not let them go with the time. That’s why I like it
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Ahah just joking. 🙂 My songs are now just acoustic guitar and voice. When I’ll be mastering, I hope to find a definite genre
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Haha Good! Although, I find writing lyrics difficult almost to the point of depression…. “She’s that Girl” is my latest attempt at writing a song. I have a friend putting it to music.
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Then I hope you’ll post it on your blog 🙂
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I will!
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You have an interesting blog. You’re a world traveler.
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World traveler is a big word… 😀 I try to expand my view with writing posts and looking for new destinations 😀
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I’ve traveled with the US Navy and Air Force my whole life. I was born in Turkey, lived in the Netherlands, Spain, Sicily, Philippines, Bermuda, Puerto Rico, Panama and Japan. I like to think my writing is made better by having lived among so many peoples.
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Thank you 🙂
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Such an adventurous life. My compliments! Of course, writing gets better with so many experiences. In writing, I like the style of Hemingway and Bukowski, coarse and concise, bare
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I love Hemingway and try to be concise. Unfortunately, I can be wordy and prone to purple prose. I keep trying though!
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